Hi, I would be thankful to someone who corrects my translation about mysticism. The Thirty-Eighth Subject: The Dangers of Unveilings of inspiration  Unveilings of inspiration have dangers and blights and a mystical traveler has to know them in order to be (2024)

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Hello! I had a hard time editing this because I am not familiar with this subject, so I hope my edits still show your original intent! One thing to keep in mind is that sometimes translations cannot be word for word. Sometimes you must change the vocabulary in order to convey a similar message from one language to another. Please tell me if you have questions!

My corrections:

The Thirty-Eighth Subject: The Dangers of Unveilings of Inspiration

Unveilings of inspiration have dangers and blights which a mystical traveler has to know in order to be released from his ego's temptation. We will mention some of these dangers here:

A) One is the difficulty in differentiating right unveilings from the wrong unveilings.

B) These unveilings of inspiration will hold a mystical traveler back from the right journey, keeping him busy whilst he should be walking the path of trust in God and monotheism. The reason for these declarations is that some of the masters use them in order to prevent their disciples from tending to these affairs. They even sometimes prevent the state of unveiling by holding sway.

C) Some of the unveilings of inspiration are not the same as realities and Islamic Divine Law.

D) Unveiling is a kind of intrusion and influence in the order of universe and the appearance of nature.

E) Unveiling causes superiority complexes. A mystical traveler will also arrogate something that he does not have, such as it happened for Mohammad Ali Báb. He was a religion student of the seminary of Najaf The Utitle and the creator (?) of the fictitious religion of Bahaiat.

F) An unveiling is not from reality, but instead from the imaginal world (intermediate suppressive world). Thus, it does not happen by perfect men. I also did not observe these unveilings of inspiration from my master.

G) A mystical traveler who is dedicated to divine love and right mysticism will not notice such affairs and if he observes something, he will tell his master. This is because he fears falling down in the place of destruction of ego.

H) Such unveilings of inspiration are also seen from those who are not saints of God. Therefore, having an unveiling is not a virtue nor a privilege.

I) Unveiling will cause a mystical traveler to be away from the world of nearness to God and mystical knowledge. This will result in him having a superiority complex and becoming arrogant. The mystical traveler in this state, instead of dedicating himself to general and destination, will be distracted by inconsequential pursuits.

J) Unveilings of inspiration are self-manifestations and there is no remedy except being treated by a master.

K) Briefly speaking, monotheist reflection and contemplating in the inner luminosity does not give a mystical traveler time to put his thoughts to unveilings of inspiration. A mystical traveler has to complete his time in a way that will leave no free time for other affairs.

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@Amin101

No problem! I got to learn something new by reading your text!

My answers to your questions:

1. 'Superiority complex" is singular while 'Superiority complexes' is plural. Because you are not indicating a subject (example, the mystical traveler / a person/ someone) in the sentence, you use the plural 'Superiority complexes'. It is more general. If you want to use singular 'Superiority complex', you can write the sentence as "Unveiling causes the mystical traveler to have a superiority complex."

2. "He was a student of the seminary of Najaf that title and THE fictitious religion of Bahaiat originated from him." --> it is correct but you forgot 'the' before the word fictitious

3. First, are you trying to say the the mystical traveler does not want for 'something' to happen or does not want to observe 'something'? "while he is unwilling to happening of that" is not understandable. You need to rewrite what you are trying to say here. Also, the grammar here is not correct. Some of your punctuation is wrong and some sentences are too long.

I rewrote here something that is more correct. Does this have what you want to convey: "A mystical traveler who is dedicated to divine love and right mysticism will not notice such affairs. If he does observe something, which he does not want to, he will tell his master because he fears falling down into the place of destruction of ego."

4. Like I said above, whether you add s on the end to a word depends on wether or not you have a subject. If you have a subject, you must determine wether it is singular or plural. Here, there is a subject (the mystical traveler). There is only one of him, so we use the singular "complex". Result has not s because it is more correct to say "This will result in him having a superiority complex..." and not "This results in him having a superiority complex...". The word 'will' indicates something in the future or something that can happen.

I hope my answers make sense! Please ask more questions if you need to!

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@Amin101

1. I don't think "utitle" is an English word? I have never heard of it so I assumed it was part of a title? Like "Najaf That Utitle"? I would remove "that utitle" unless it has significance to you.

2. "A mystical traveler who is dedicated to divine love and right mysticism will not notice such affairs. If he observes something, without becoming fascinated by his observation, he will tell his master because he fears falling down in the place of destruction of ego."

Does this convey your meaning?

Sorry for the late reply! I hope this works! Let me know if you have more questions!

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@Amin101 Oh!! I understand! Does futile refer to the religion of Bahaiat? Are you calling it a futile religion?

If so, use this: "He was a student of the seminary of Najaf and the futile and fictitious religion of Bahaiat originated from him."

Does this make sense?

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yeah, Thank you.

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If one day you wanted to learn Farsi, give me a message here. Maybe that day we can do a language exchange.

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God bless you

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@Amin101 No problem! It was a lot of fun reading your work! And thank you for the kind offer! God bless you too!